What do you think of this poem/thing?

Question

im tired of working,

and im tired of you!

im tired txting,

and not hitting through.

im starting to get sick but you dont really care

just read black&white and just stare....just stare.

for as you read this and weep you'll now know that im dead,

start crying, start screaming, for now you realized what you've read.

a suicide note wrote out with such thought,you should feel like **** now,

knowing it was you who could of had it stopped. if you would of told me you cared...

or said a simple "i love you" you could of detoured my path on the way to despair.

but i cant change course now now because ive felt this since birth,

now one body less will breathe a little less air on this earth

And no im not suicidal>

Answer 1

You sound like a thirteen-year-old who is trying to sound dark and depressing.

Answer 2

That is a really good poem. seems like there is something that u may have experienced which made u put that together. I liked it very much... nice 1!

Answer 3

its a good poem,but y did u writethis???i hope ur ok if u wrote this bc sum1 hurt u...ill add u 2 my contacts in case u want 2 talk...

from,

<3not@all_in_love<3

Answer 4

Your thing is a shallow rhyme without imagery that will appeal to the rap crowd.

Answer 5

as long as ure not suicidal or a goth.......its pretty good.

Answer 6

its pretty good.

Answer 7

Um... Ok? No you're not Emo, but something's def. wrong